The writer should revise the following:
1- If you find the term “Society System” any where within the essay, Please change it to the term “Security System”.
2- Change any word or term that you feel it is high level difficult academic word. For example, the sentence “Guidance of its properties” must to be change. Remember, this essay is 1-2 years college level essay so you shouldn’t use difficult words and terms.
3- Each source in the Reference page should start with Author’s Surname, name, etc. You should follow the APA style.
I will upload pictures that includes my professor comments. Make sure to go over them.